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Privyet, Mlle. Clau. Take this a compliment - your entry is nearly painful to read. ^_~ Chilling, grotesque, but it pulls of the actor's blase lechery and the girl's helplessness ...

Moved to Fantasy Fiction Hey Dark Magik. If you want comments or reviews, so to speak, of your work, you'll want them in the Litary Forums. The Writing Corner is ...

A weighty read, in one way, Brad - as often - and for its brevity, it's laced to suffocation with ideas and with death. I'd say Hell, but as yet, ...

Oy, 'tis longer than the prologue. I suppose I'll print it out - it'll make my remarks more comprehensive - and more reasonable - than if I rush through it ...

Hey Adam - I know I haven't gotten a critique on the first chapter, but I wanted to run through the second, if possible, while I had time. ^_^ “Will ...

'Lo Jack. I realise now Sam has hit points I meant to go over, but I suppose all approaches bring a different light to a thing. I'll reiterate that it ...

A completely engaging introduction, Sam - it was much cleaner than I recall the former fragment that I read, being. No line by line then, as they become odious at ...

[ Moved to Fiction ] Hullo Alginon. ^_^ You start on an involving note - it caught my attention in the first few sentences. But the lack of paragraph structure ...

Imp: I tried jigging that section around in all the different ways I could think (including the way you suggested), but none of them really 'worked'. At the moment, I ...

'Lo Bubbles - quick thoughts here. In the morning, she dresses herself in layers: [ it seems it ought to flow with either yesterday and tomorrow being possessive, or neither ...

Ah, Myth, you reposted! And I have to say near the same thing as CL: my time is abbreviated, to say the least. !_! But this seemed quite a bit ...

I'm inclined to focus merely on how much I enjoyed the images, as you have an amazing chain of them here, atmospheric and dark. The description was lovely, though heavy. ...

As usual, very SPEW-ish. ^_~ But with your to-the-point narration, Grif, it really keeps up the pace and keeps up with its, ah, amusement factor. That's meant to be the ...

Beautifully tight, as is apt with beginning being the ending. ^_^ Nothing at all I see to go on about as far as critique. The dialogue moved the piece, really ...

Hey Rodent. If you're not looking for a critique, but rather for ideas or certain tips, you may want to post a fragment like this in Fiction Discussion and Tips ...